Saturday, May 27, 2017

Retribution Rails by Erin Bowman | ARC Review

"Write every day, just to get in the habit, and know that whatever you have written is neither good nor as bad as you think," -Jane Smiley

If you're a frequent reader of my blog, you know how much I raved about Vengeance Road by Erin Bowman. When I heard how she was writing a companion novel, titled Retribution Rails, I lost it. I preordered it and set the release date in my calendar nine months in advance. 

On her newsletter, I found out that I could have the chance to receive an ARC, in physical or e-galley form - and I did! I jumped on the chance to read this book. I absolutely devoured it - YA Western might be a genre I need to get my feet wet in now. 


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As per usual, we'll begin with the drawbacks. 


The Bad

1. Pacing

This is mostly attributed to how it lagged in the middle. The end and beginning were strong, action-packed, and poignant. When Reece, Charlotte, and Kate arrived at the homestead in the mountains is when the pace and even the passage of time itself in the novel came to a screeching halt. While there was some good character conflict there, there was too long of a break between action scenes in the middle. However, I adored seeing Kate and Jesse again. 

The Neutral

1. Charlotte's Conflict

While I flipped back and forth between whether I liked Charlotte or not, she made her own conflict seem petty at times. The resolution to her conflict, while it made sense, I didn't much like it. It came a bit too early and was astoundingly abrupt. 

2. Hints at Romance

While this didn't come up until about halfway through the book, I still didn't like it. The problem was, was that I saw their dynamic and wanted them to kind of 'pride & prejudice' it out, which they did. However, I never shipped them or saw them as a good couple. I wanted them to become good friends and be able to depend on each other. This would have better fit their established relationship dynamic. 

The Good

1. Character Arcs

As always, Erin Bowman is phenomenal at writing character arcs. Reece's redemption arc was sympathetic and emotional and perfect, and even Charlotte's arc evolved naturally and came to a satisfying conclusion. It was great to look back and see how much they had changed over the course of the story. I'm such a sucker for good character arcs and development, and this took front and center stage, for a good reason. The conversations that developed the character conflicts were stellar. It really does make these stories stand out, especially in a world where there isn't much character development or it doesn't take center stage. 

2. Voices

Another amazing thing about Erin's stories is how quickly she developed Reece's and Charlotte's voices. From their slang, sentence structure, and vocabulary, she is able to build characters within a few words and let us jump inside their head. I never forgot who was talking, and with multiple POVs, that can be a problem. As someone who loves to write in multiple POVs, hats off!

3. The End

The climax was perfectly paced and perfectly timed, unlike Vengeance Road. It was heart-pounding and poetic and action-packed. The train scene was phenomenal and intense. Reece killing Rose was emotional and flawless. The denouement was bittersweet and amazing as we watched the characters move on. Just, the whole ending section was flawless. Just flawless. 


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I can't say whether I like Retribution Rails better than Vengeance Road. But for now, they rank as equals. Erin Bowman, keep writing Westerns, because I'll keep devouring them!

8.75/10 would recommend. 

~The WordShaker

Saturday, May 20, 2017

Working in the Library as a Writer | Olivia J

"Books are the plane, the train, and the road. They are the destination and the journey. They are home," -Anna Quindlen

I recently got a job as a page at the local library. And it's been killing me. 

Context, however, is important. It's not an inherently bad job, even though I work 15 hours a week during the school year. It's quiet and low-stress and I can keep to myself. However, I've found that it's not the shelving books part that's hard. It's the duration of the hours and the constant existential crisis it gives me. 

I didn't realize how much I feared growing up until I got this job. It fills me with an existential kind of fear that only produces . . . anger. Anger that this is life and that I am growing old. Anger that this is not what I want out of my life. Just, anger. 

Hats off to Lauren, my best friend who has never wanted to grow up. You know where it's at. 


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However, enough bitching. Onto what will benefit you, as readers and writers. 

The best part of my job is that it's inspiring. As I shelve book after book and absorb the stories around me, it only adds fuel to the fire of me wanting to see my stories on these shelves, my name on a cover. It makes me want to write and get my stories out there to be shelved in libraries all over the world. 

So - not that I recommend this - maybe get a job at a library or volunteer to shelve books. It will appease the pensive booklover and also arouse the aspiring writer in you. 

~The WordShaker

Saturday, May 13, 2017

Clarke Griffin: The Useless Heroine | Analysis of The 100

"Read obsessively. Write furiously. Edit carefully," -Sissy Gavrilaki

Back in Seasons 1 and 2, I actually really liked Clarke Griffin. She was strong and sensitive and a great leader. However, she has been on a slow de-evolution since Season 3, although it has rapidly gone downhill since Season 4. I wasn't able to quite place why this happened and my subsequent disliking of her as a character. 

But it hit me in 4x11, "The Other Side".

Clarke's cold, stupid, and almost rash decisions are motivated by one thing: nothing. That's it. She's completely lost herself. In this whole battle to save the human race, she's become this archetype trying to save humanity, but also being a total asshole in the process. 


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Clarke has lost her motivation. In Season 1, her motivation was to keep her people safe and to help them survive. In Season 2, it was to get them back home safely. In Season 3, it was pretty much Lexa for a while there, and then it was to save everyone from ALIE. In Season 4, it's become even more generic with 'saving humanity' plotline. But the wider Clarke's motivation gets, the less she feels like a real person, the less we connect with her and root for her. She is lacking a meaningful character arc or motivation, which is necessary for any character. It's like, Step 3 in creating a character.

Another problem is Clarke's lack of relationships. Now, don't get me wrong, I'm not saying that Clarke needs a love interest or should just get with Bellamy already. While that would be nice, what I'm really talking about is how Clarke doesn't have any strong relationships we can root for, whether that be friendships, family members, or someone romantically. These relationships make a character more realistic, human, and make the audience want the main character to succeed. With people that the main character cares about, this raises the stakes. However, Clarke's friends or lovers are all dead, and the ones who aren't, their relationships have been severely neglected. 

Why do we love Bellamy, Octavia, Jasper, Monty, Murphy, and Raven so much?  Because they have people they love and who love them, and they fight for what they want and have clear and realistic character traits. They have interesting motivations that compel them to act and drive their storylines in dynamic and emotional ways. 

On the other hand, Clarke has become flat. Almost a Deus Ex Machina of sorts, where she always is the savior and always has to solve the problem. Without an interesting or emotional motivation, her actions seem, well, bitchy. Because Clarke never has emotional depth, change, or true struggle, she has become a gray slate, stagnant and uninteresting. 

And it's a real tragedy.


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An amazing little post about the missed opportunity of great character conflict in 4x11:

http://wellamyblake.tumblr.com/post/160552229725/purging-2-disappointments-from-411 

~The WordShaker

Saturday, May 6, 2017

BLOOM 2017 | Olivia J

"A writer, I think, is someone who pays attention to the world," -Susan Sontag

Every year, Bloom surpasses itself. This year, I was unfortunately bogged down with other things in my life - namely my job - but, regardless . . . IT'S BLOOM. 

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I felt that I had a much stronger display of art and writing. I also purchased my own business cards! This only reinforces my unflinching desire to go to SCAD and make writing and art my career. 




Shoutout to the amazing Creative Writing Club for sticking through it all, even when it's rough. You are all my children and I'm so proud of all of you!

My art was featured as well. The piece that was selected was "Fresh Air", a 16x20 collage. 

Fresh Air, collage. Copyright 2017


Overall, Bloom was great, but it went by way too fast. The preparation, the event, everything. I wish we could go back and do it all again, because it's my favorite kind of stress.

Also, please take a business card from me because I'm desperate.  

~The WordShaker

Saturday, April 29, 2017

Fanfiction's Purpose in the Writing World

"Every writer I know has trouble writing," -Joseph Heller

I've been a writer for fourteen years.

While this specific title wasn't self-proclaimed until about six years ago, and while I haven't made a single cent on my passion, fourteen years to my name is impressive for the blossoming age of seventeen, not to toot my own horn or anything.

Like any human trying anything new, we imitate. As developing children, we learn to speak and walk by watching our parents - we imitate.

This is why fan-fiction is essential for new writers.

Fan-fiction, for all you noobs out there, is fiction written by fans of a particular original work.  Examples being: a fan writing an alternate ending to The Hunger Games series, about a character's untold backstory on Lost, about what happened to Hazel Grace after Gus died and she read his letter - it can be anything, as long as it's related to a fandom.  However, fan-fiction has a notorious reputation on the internet for being extremely and inappropriately sexual, and for having poor grammar and atrocious writing.

Like any young child, I spent a good portion of my free time coloring and drawing pictures.  Except I would create a series of pictures, and characters and plotlines to go along with it.  And even before I was able to pick up a pencil and scratch out any words myself, I was creating stories.  So I would tell my mom what each picture meant and what was happening, and she would write them down and then staple them together.  To this day, they sit in my basement in a huge Tupperware tub - that's how much I wrote.

And my most notable works was a three-part retelling of Cinderella where she was a princess and a secret agent who lived under the stairs of her evil step-family's house with her cat. My most favorite, however, was 'The Incredibles Meet Shark-Boy and Lava-Girl"  where these two bands of supers teamed up to fight the Omnidroid 11.

I kid you not.

Later, however, I began to develop my own stories with my own plot and characters - and while these were loosely based on my childhood obsessions and almost every character had a real life counterpart, fan-fiction was a good part of my writing journey.

This is why I am for writers writing fan-fiction - as long as this is not their only avenue. Admittedly, I still dabble in fan-fiction if I'm in between ideas, my original story isn't doing much for me, or if I just want to get back into the mood of writing.

And even for experienced writers, fan-fiction is good to exercise the writing muscle - to try new things, to perfect a skill, or to just keep you in shape in between projects.

While I would personally hesitate telling people that you're a writer if all you write is fan-fiction, fan-fiction can be constructive to any writer. It's important to remember that  fan-fiction has it's place - and this place is for personal enjoyment and exercising the writing muscle.

Write carefully, fanpeople.

~The WordShaker

Saturday, April 22, 2017

The Small Things ~ A Character Study

"Find what causes a commotion in your heart. Find a way to write about that," -Richard Ford

In the novel I'm currently working on, Amelia gives a list to Roman for him to read whenever he feels down. It ends up being the framework for what they do to make someone in the group feel better. 

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a list of good things 
by Amelia
-music. the windows down, blasting kind
-the taste of chocolate when that's all you're craving
-the night sky, when it's darkest out and you can see all the stars
-being there for someone
-fall leaves and their colors
-hot tea, a good book, and the sounds of rain
-local cafes with gourmet sandwiches
-the laughter of someone you love
-fairy lights
-the one thing that makes you want to be alive and on this earth
-this list

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Amelia loved the stars, the sea, the open road, and summer heat, windows down, wind-in-your-hair rock music. 

Amelia hated small talk, the crushing brightness of winter afternoons, and most people, some of the time. 

Roman loved the ebb and flow of classical music, and the way that it fell like rain from his fingers. 

Roman hated walls, abandoned playgrounds at night, and himself.

Bailey loved the cold of a lake and the laughter that seemed infectious as it passed through others. 

Bailey hated upturned noses, dirty snow, and the way her brain would swirl like milk and betray her. 

Elliot loved the way his favorite musical could always make him cry, and how Bailey would never make fun of him for it. 

Elliot hated the snickers of mocking laughter, actual Snickers, and the man he called his father. 

Alice loved the sand under her fingernails, the nervous sweat of a crush, and all things involving Coca-Cola. 

Alice hated the grip of uselessness, skinned knees, and her feelings. 

Nick loved the electric thrill of leather and dirt, and her. He loved her. 

Nick hated the sighs of unenthusiasm, candid photos, and anyone remotely like him. 


Together, they were a collection of oddities, an antique shop from the future, but never the summation of their broken parts. Like a puzzle piece, like flowers growing through cracks, they found a place. 

That place wasn't perfect - it was just as wrought and bent as they were - but it was a good place. A safe place, like a little handmade, painted vase in a world of mass-produced pots. 

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So. I guess that's a bit of a sneak peek of my novel. I've been working on it a lot more lately, and hell, it feels good to be getting elbow deep in creating again. 

~The WordShaker

Saturday, April 15, 2017

13 Thoughts about "13 Reasons Why"

"The worst thing you can do is censor yourself as the pencil hits the paper. You must not edit until you get it all on paper," -Stephen Sondheim

Note: These are my opinions, mostly. Feel free to disagree, kindly. I know this is a sensitive topic, but don't discredit me or my thoughts because I didn't find this series flawless. Just because I didn't think this was perfect and I think there are some things wrong with it doesn't mean it's not important or impactful to other people. 


1. Clay Jensen is an angel, and the actor is phenomenal. 

You can't help but fall in love with Clay. Anyone who says they don't love Clay is lying. He's a strong character who surely can carry the weight of the show on his shoulders. Dylan Minette does an unspeakably great job. He captures the mannerisms, the subtle movements, and the emotions of Clay with astounding perfection. But Clay isn't perfect - he's human. And that's even more perfect. 

2. It's definitely not what I expected. 

One of the reasons I hesitated on watching this show is that it was pitched as a mystery. Still, I expected it to be about how the 13 reasons connected, dealt with it, listened, and learned. Or something like that. I guess I assumed that because that's the stories that I like, and I was a little bored and offput by the direction of the show. However, since I haven't read the book, I came to accept it for what it was.  

3. Justin's flawless character development. 

I'll talk more about characters and character development later. But Justin especially. We're led to believe he's this basic, popular hot guy, but then it turns this stereotype on its head. Through all of this awful shit he does, we are still able to see what he goes through and why he's like this. And, truth be told,  I didn't like him much until his backstory is slowly revealed. What sold me is his undying love for Jessica. It was so heartbreaking and admirable of him, and it showed his humanity, which fleshed him out immediately, and then everything else he had done in the show made sense.  

4. I had a hard time connecting to Hannah in the beginning. 

I attribute this to her lack of development as a human being. For about half of the show, I sympathized with Hannah but I didn't empathize with her feelings or see her as this whole person, as we should have from the beginning. If she was developed as a character earlier, the beginning part of the show wouldn't be so mild, and the things people did to Hannah in the beginning would have hit the audience harder. Another complaint is the question of why she didn't tell her parents. Up until we see them fighting a bit at the end, we're never given a reason why she wouldn't tell them about her other problems. This also was a roadblock in me connecting with her because, at times, she seemed to be acting kind of ridiculous. However, as the series progressed, we were shown that she really is a good person, further solidifying her character. 

5. Episode 13 lost its way. 

Throughout the whole series, I found that this was less about Hannah than it was about Clay. And episode 13 should have put more of the focus on Clay, and seeing how he truly learns and moves on. Where it does pick itself back up is when Clay calls after Skye. However, it wasn't as powerful as I had wanted. More on this later. 

6. I've heard a lot of stories about suicide, and this was mostly uninspirational. 

"But Olivia," you say. "It's about a girl who commits suicide. It's not supposed to be inspirational."  And to that I say, the purpose of art is to teach. And while it does do a great job of teaching the watcher about bullying and it's effects, it lacks something. Every good teacher should inspire us to become our best selves, to reach for the stars. And since art teaches, it should also inspire. An exception to this is when Clay reaches out to Skye, because this shows he learned his lesson and changes because of it, which is inspirational. However, nothing else in the story is inspiratioal, and with a story as dark and depressing as this, it needs to have some level of inspirational quality in order to balance out the darkness.  It's important for a story like this to be inspirational so it gives the watchers - who probably relate to this - hope.

8. The cast of complex characters. 

Clay, Sheri, Alex, Zach, Tyler, Ryan, Justin. Some of these characters were slow burns, like Justin and Zach. But all of the characters above are truly complex human beings. And what makes them so is that we're not only shown their personality and who they are, but that they aren't just the demons shown on Hannah's tapes. They're bad and they're good, and this makes them beautifully and enjoyable complex characters. 

9. The all too many one-sided characters. 

Bryce, Courtney, Marcus, Jessica. Now, you may be wondering why I placed Jessica on this list. Throughout the show, I never liked her. I thought she was a resolute bitch, and surely what she went through was tragic and awful, but, like I mentioned earlier, we never see her having a redeeming quality or something else that would humanize her. She needs to be a character first.  I don't think I need to explain why the other three have made this list. However, this isn't a superhero movie. We're not dealing with supervillains, we're dealing with high schoolers. 

10. Lack of attention on mental illness. 

Bullying is rarely the sole reason why someone takes their own life because, in order for someone to commit suicide like that, they can't be in the right headspace. This could have been more complex if layers about Hannah's mental state would have been factored in. If we were shown more about how this not only affected her emotionally, but psychologically, it would make it not only more relatable to people but also more realistic and complex.

11. Episode 11 is a work of pure art. 

Best episode, by far. It was so insightful to both Hannah and Clay, especially Clay's flaws, and why he has them. Every emotional moment hit like a baseball bat. But truly, the reason Episode 11 was so beautiful was because I felt it. My uncle committed suicide about a year and a half ago, and everything Clay was feeling - I had felt. And one of the reasons I thought the show - and some of the characters - were so unrealistic was because someone died and they never felt the feelings I did, thought the things I did. Until Episode 11. I cried during Episode 11 because it was truly what I needed, what I wanted out of that show. I recommend this show just for Episode 11 alone. 

12. Great cinematography. 

Dynamic shots, camera concentrations on a certain character, mood lighting. These all added up to make the cinematography of the show something spectacular. It's like the writing, if the medium was a book. Something I noticed was the flashbacks had a warmer, yellow-toned lighting to them, but the present day had, cooler, duller lighting. This was a great way to distinguish the timing, and even the mood, so much more effectively than just having Clay's cut on his head. The transitions between the tapes and the present day were smooth and dynamic. The storylines were weaved together nicely, and the alternating chunks of the story weren't too long. 

13. Focus confusion on Hannah and Clay. 

Was this Clay's story?  Was this Hannah's story?  Both?  I ask these questions because their answers aren't always so clear. Based on what Clay does at the end, and how he percievably changes, you'd think it's Clay's story. However, by the climax, it's Hannah's story. By splitting the focus on the two characters, we're left feeling like neither story was explored or completed like it should be. When you have a story, there must be one singular character that the story is about, otherwise, the arcs fall flat on their ass. This is what happened here. Clay's mental health, him as a character, the impact he could have had, are all cut short on time exploring Hannah. This could have been balanced out much better by changing the lens in which Clay listened to the tapes, and the way her backstories are portrayed. 

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Now, all of these points contribute to my final, fourteenth thought, like the fourteenth tape.

14. The ending left me frustrated, which is not what it should have done. 

I finished it and screamed. That couldn't be it. Not a drive off into the distance and a fade out. Truly, it felt unfair. Besides a bit of Clay's personal narrative, virtually nothing else was resolved. The court case, the status of most of the characters, what happened when her parents listened to the tapes.

 And you could argue that these things were supposed to be left open-ended because both Hannah's story and Clay's story was done. However, we've come to care about what happens with Hannah's parents, the case, and the other characters. By not giving us feasably conclusive ends to the story, it feels like a steal. It feels unsatisfying. And after a story like that, that's the last thing we want to feel. 

Sure, the author very rarely is required to give the consumer exactly what they want, but at this point, I pose the question: Why build up these storylines, if you're not going to complete them?

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Overall, I really enjoyed - or, as much as I could enjoy a series about a dead girl - this tv show, even if I did have some complaints. I wish there was a fourteenth episode, giving this series the conclusion it really deserves. I do believe it puts forth an important message that words have power, and we can never know what someone else is going through. 

~The WordShaker